Ali Field

Journal #4 – analyzing an analytical paper

The introduction is too specific, instead of giving the techniques that support the effect of, he/she goes in depth into why the techniques support it specifically. Stating a few techniques and not going in depth would help give a more stable start and outline for the piece. He/she also brings up that the journey is long, then goes into the big mama effect, which is point of view, making me question why the journey being long mattered at all. He/she did not state the book or author in the intro.

The author had good organization in the piece. Each paragraph was specific to a technique and gave examples. Having the techniques laid out in the intro would help the reader know what to expect throughout the paper. The author used text to direct the help the reader know and understand the techniques and effect which was very helpful and effective. The short pieces of text really helped her analysis. The author went in depth with the analysis of each technique and did not just summarize the text. This piece was overall very well written, although the introduction was weak.